Board Thread:Theories and Speculation/@comment-12509038-20150119062617/@comment-19730389-20150122003846

I'm reading your story Kirin, and I'm halfway through Kaguya. So far this is very well written, I don't see any flaws. But I should say. I think you should introduce Black Zetsu earlier. Have BZ be manipulated by her to the point where she gives him a speech like she's the mother of the world and that's when BZ starts to call her Mother.